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Days of running wild soaking in the sun
Marked memories of youth a precious one
Ducktails bobby-sockers making the scene
Football games and prom king and queen
Rock-n-Roll music playing around the clock
All the while old man time was running tick-tock
To soon those days faded and were gone
As the working world beckoned on
Long weeks hard work never enough pay
Life's responsibilities left little time to play
How time flies before the eyes
Gray hair showing it sure doesn't lie
Wishing I was young again and back in the past
Enjoying it once more with a blast
My oh my those times were crazy
Laughing and dancing with my Be-Bop-Baby



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The following comments are for "Be-Bop-Baby"
by lynlin

flowing
the flow of this piece is awesome. everything fits together like pieces of a puzzle!... agree, sum punctuation would have made it eaier to read, but i don't think it affected ur flow that much!! nice write!! continue!

( Posted by: drkpoet [Member] On: February 14, 2004 )

Coke float
All I needed with this poem was a delicious scoop of vanilla ice cream with a cold glass of Coca-Cola, while I smoothed the wrinkles out of my fave poodle skirt, and straightened my barrette that held my ponytail! Very nice, very nice. Easy read and vivid imagery.

( Posted by: amethyst [Member] On: February 14, 2004 )





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