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Spiders weaved their silvery art
Amidst the discards of another era
While dust gathered in the attic
The smell of time hung everwhere

Into this semi-dark world I walked
Creaking boards echo beneath my feet
Shattering this silence around me
As whispering drafts settle against my cheek

Ghostly images appear to reach out
Sending shivers running down my spine
Quickening the beating of my heart
Imagination thrown into overtime

Mystic amiss the swirl of unsettled dust
Its vibrant past seemed to speak
From through-out it's very shadows
Of secrets within the attics keep

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The following comments are for "The Attic"
by lynlin

Thats a good one. Disturbing the past, you created a really vivid image for me.

The first line in the last verse:

should there bei "amidst" instead of "amiss"?

( Posted by: Sneaky [Member] On: February 11, 2004 )

Good description, but I would have liked to see more progression with the "I" in the story (some sort of reaction or action), something more than just the emotions reflected by the surroundings.

( Posted by: macman202 [Member] On: February 11, 2004 )

Surround Sound
I think that typically humans are an emotional mirror of what they see, and also this taps into their emotions so I think the emtional response that was depicted in this poem was actually quite active. As emotion is probably one of the most active things in human actions. Emotions have a wide range of physical and mental energy connected with them.
I loved this poem I thought it was virtually perfect. You did a great job!

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: February 11, 2004 )

scary but felt like a good scene. if its a movie il watch it again.

( Posted by: webguy [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

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