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Grey Treachery

Line of demarcation
fluffy white behind
seamless grey before
that was one week ago a bay.

Wind whips twisted patterns
quiet whispers against seamless
slippery flatness seems to beckon
come to me, my reckless
take a step.

I will not crack or shatter
suck you into silent blackness
I will not freeze you breathless
nor heal over back to seamless
trapping you beneath.

Take a step, a slip, my reckless
I am grey treachery
slide into my chilly reach.

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by cybele

love the imagery, i wonder if you could elaborate on the subject?

( Posted by: poesandpoetry [Member] On: February 6, 2004 )

dead on, Pen, as usual
Thanks for the compliment p&p; and yes, Pen, you saw the north Atlantic.Here in Baltimore, ice cutters have been working to keep the shipping lines open, and there are parts of the harbor that have frozen over. One spot in particular where this fall I got my feet wet, felt spray and rain and wind during Hurricane Isabel, has turned to a flat surface, and it called to me. I resisted.

( Posted by: cybele [Member] On: February 6, 2004 )

Something that powerful does what it wants, it comes down to how we take it.

My mother told me once that lightning made her want to hide beneath her bed. "Not me," I said, "it makes me want to go play in it."

So I understand your point - and like the poem.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: February 13, 2004 )

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