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Daddy can you teach me to ride my bike
All the other kids think I'm just a little tike
Could you take off the training wheels
So they won't call me a baby still
Bright eyes and infectious sunny smiles
From a warm and precious gentle child
Just a few of the little things that makes life
Dance as if to a tune of a fife
Before you know times gone by
Within a blink of the eye
For in the next heart beat it seems
That child's now in there teens
And its daddy can I borrow the car
There's a concert with my favorite singing star
Promise I'll be home before mid-night
Daddy please say I can..all right!
Just seventeen and never made it home
A strangers voice on the telephone
Said there'd be no more new memories
From this child who called me Daddy






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The following comments are for "Seventeen"
by lynlin

seventeen
I have a 17 yr old and this makes me think of my deepest fear. Well done

( Posted by: f. j. dubs [Member] On: February 7, 2004 )

daddy
this piece stabs at the parent in all of us... i pray that this is not true. Well written.

( Posted by: poesandpoetry [Member] On: February 7, 2004 )

thanks to f j dubs
Thank you for the comment on my poem Seventeen. I had wanted to tackle a delicate subject without cluttering it up with a lot of emotional sentiments. Choosing to let the readers own thoughts enter into play,Thank you again for feeling I'd done a good job of it.
lynlin

( Posted by: lynlin [Member] On: February 7, 2004 )

p.s.
This thanks also goes to the others who commented on my poem.

( Posted by: lynlin [Member] On: February 7, 2004 )

Tears
Tears welled up in my eyes as I read the last stanza.Surely a masterpiece ! Well done , Very well done.

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: February 8, 2004 )

daddy Dearest
this was so very touching, my heart was pouring with emotion.......wonderful, wondeful piece. may you be blessed:-)

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: February 15, 2004 )





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