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somehwere deep inside me may regret this
but i know it aint right
i think i should leave now
cause i cant stay here tonight

we've been down that dark alley
too many times before
not to know what comes after
we reopen that door

somehwere deep inside me may regret this
but i know it aint right
i think i should leave now
cause i cant stay here tonight

we'll be in heaven for a moment
before we fall back to hell
but then again when i think about it
you never can quite tell

and i know i may regret this
'cause i know it aint right
maybe this time will be different
so i'll stay here tonight

------
of all misfortune, the worst kind of fate is to have been happy.
-boethius


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The following comments are for "tonight"
by ochimusha

Perfect
OCIMUSHA, that was am awesome poem. I deeply regret that I have felt this sentiment for YEARS, and you actually put what I was feeling into words. When a writer takes something right out of your mouth or mind, it speaks to you in clear definition and taps into a frequency unheard by others. You achieved that for me today, thank you!

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: February 6, 2004 )

wow
john79, i am deeply moved to hear how much my poems have affected you.

im my mind, there are only two kinds of writers: those who write because they enjoy it, and those who have no other way to vent their emotions. needless to say, i do not write for it's entertainment value. all my writings were just an outlet for me, i never thought that someone else could relate to them, let alone enjoy them.

however, it's wonderful responses like those you've given me that drive me to become a better writer and write more. thank you! and best wishes for you own writing!

( Posted by: ochimusha [Member] On: February 6, 2004 )

Glad you got the transmission
Thanks for the luck in my own writing, and you are more than welcome for the responses, I love all your work!
John

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: February 6, 2004 )

Lyrical
It is pretty good as a poem, but think it is more readable as lyrics, seems to have a chorus section throughout.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: February 13, 2011 )





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