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(To Daniel Machon)

Whispers "Death", the night
The echo of the hours fall
Spreads like stain, and for a beat
The people are united
In distant grief

A youth has gone this night
His Soul, this plain, has faded
We pray there be another
Higher realm of life
A resting place of Soul
We call him there

Whispers "Life", the night
Events produce a ripple, hope
Harsh truth has worked, reminder
To live life full, and so we cope
Philosophise and shed an annual tear

The site of crash still echoes though
The hour of fall, the Soul's departure

And forever be the whisper
"Death"

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The answer to EVERYTHING!!!:- The Cycle.
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The following comments are for "Whispers"
by A. Cain

Liked.
Don't expect wise comments from me, either. But I did like that poem. Nice job.

( Posted by: Cryptic Rapture [Member] On: February 3, 2004 )

Stylish Combination
Imaginatively combined the paragraphs
-Whispers "Death", the night,
-whispers "Life", the night
- forever be the whisper "Death"

Very Stylish combination.Wonderful!!

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: February 8, 2004 )

kewl
your poem was very unique something you don't see often!! I liked it!!

( Posted by: punker chick [Member] On: February 18, 2004 )





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