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the memories of war
so vivid and true
is such a great nightmare
that I have lived through
I just close my eyes
and it comes back to me
its hard to believe
what theses eyes have seen
the blood and the tears
that cause me such grief
the jungle of memories
I stand in disbelief
I did all of the things
I was told to do
I hated most of it
and all I lived through
the carnage and bombs
the sights I have seen
o god take these memories
or give me the means
to clear all my thoughts
of war and the fights
and give me just peace
that comes in the night

------
Frankie J. Dubs


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The following comments are for "nightmares of war"
by F. J. DUBS

very good exploration of of a difficultsubject
I like this one. The last few lines remind me a little of the prayer used by AA -- "God give me the grace to accept the things I cannot change, the strength to face those things which I may change, yet, and the wisdom to know the difference." Also, conversations with my father (USMC, retired) about the special kind of forced irrationality required of soldiers serving during times of war (How did the marines landing on the beaches, D-Day, manage this?) The courage required is unimaginable.

I look forward to reading more of your work -- keep writing!

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: February 5, 2004 )

'Nightmares Of War'
It's a great subject and though your poem was readable and it flowed nicely, I don't think it lives up to the thoughts behind it. What I do when I come across a topic that I feel strongly enough about is write many poems, not just rewrite an original but write another, with the same title, and another and another to bring out as much as I can of my feelings in the hope that one piece I create, will be as emotion provoking as my inner finds the subject.

I hate commenting with a negative, and although it's maybe a duty of lit.org, I avoid it, if I've nothing nice to say I just rate it and run, lol, but I needed to say this here, because I believe that you CAN create a piece worthy of this subject, you just need to play around with it more.

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: February 6, 2004 )

this poem
to those that choose to read this poem I would like you to know that this was written as I lived it and though I may have not written it the it comes from my heart. Thank all of you who took the time to read my dreams!!!!!!

( Posted by: f. j. dubs [Member] On: February 6, 2004 )





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