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Last night I held you in my arms Tasting and inhaling all your special charms
As a full moon beamed its approving smile
We swayed to breath taking music all the while
Though I know not from where it came...
This soft and intoxicating melody
Mingling with a scent of jasmine...
That perfumed the very air
As we danced upon heavens stairs
Waltzing across the expanse of the stars
No boundaries laid before us oh no...
For heaven itself truly knows
Love flies on magical wings
Making all things possible...
Reaching out far beyond even dreams

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The following comments are for "Wings of Love"
by lynlin

Your poem had a very nice lyrical quality to it. Though I think that love poems are done to death, you added something to the pile that was unique. The melange of melody and jasmine? Very nice. One pet peeve of mine: "That perfumed the very air"...I'm not a big fan of using 'very' this way, since it's almost a cliche masking itself as something profound. Nothing formally wrong with using it, just a quirk I have. A nice poem nonetheless.


( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: February 4, 2004 )

Lyrically Methodical
I enjoyed your poem and I also think the word "very" is just fine. The last three lines ar actually the best!

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: February 10, 2004 )

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