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Seeping from inside him
Pertruding from his sides
Ollies spasms go unheeded
No one hears his cries
Tissue dressed with oil
An inferno clothed in skin
Now the flames begin to burn
Encroachment from within
Olly argues good or bad, this incarnate cremation?
Utopia or is it hell?
Senseless or sensation?

Confusions use illusion
Ollies heads ablaze
Mind games, migraines drive insane
Burn my brain he prays
Up in smoke his flesh erupts
Skin and body melt
The lights inside his eyes grow dim
Inside the flame flicks out
Ollies screams still echo out his sick burning desire
No one wants reminded of the day Ollie went on fire.

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I may be stupid but at least I'm not handsome.


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The following comments are for "Spontaneous Combustion"
by Emlyn

Flames
This sort of thing is right up my alley! Very unsettling. Nice imagery - I really got the sense of Ollie's internal angst. Keep it up!

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: January 30, 2004 )

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Thanks very much for the comment, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Writing rhyming acrostic poems is a lot of fun, they're a cross between a jigsaw puzzle and a crossword. This poems pretty old but I still like reading it.

Em

( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: January 31, 2004 )

I like the visuals you put in my head.
Now if only I can keep them there.

Great stuff. Thanks for your comments.

( Posted by: gasmask_girl [Member] On: March 2, 2004 )

really good
i loved this..

( Posted by: ammaji [Member] On: May 22, 2004 )





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