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The year is 2025 the earth as we once new it is no more, for the war between Heaven and Hell has begun and earth is now the battle field. For centuries they have fought to see who has control of mankind, and now the battle is here among the smoke and ash that was once earth. What if man had obeyed Gods law?... Would this war still be happening?...Would mankind still be hiding in caves and now praying to a God that tried for so long to save them?. Maybe not, but now it's to late to ever find out for this battle is at full throttle and the forces of hell is taking over, for even in a time of need man will take the side of darkness with hope of a easy life with out Gods law. The land is filled with decaying bodies of fallen angels that fought for man and lost to the hot steal of a demons sword. The demons are many for mankind has been on this planted for thousands of years, and for every wrong doing that man took part in hell gained another soldier with hope that this day would soon be at hand. But out of the smoke there is a hero, a man who has fought beside the angels of heaven and refuses to let the army of demons rule. He is a man with the fighting skills of an army, with only his sword and the heart of a soldier to pull him through, his name .....Is Deacon Taylor.
The day is Friday, the time? ...who knows! The days are long, and if you are one of the lucky ones you might get an hour of sleep, for you see demons never sleep so this war never stops. Do you think that man ever thought this day would come?.....those are just some of the questions that are going through Deacon's mind as he makes his way to the place that was once the city of NewYork but is know the heart of the battle. Many cities have fallen and now only a few remain standing, but the real fight is here in this city the heart of what is now evil. Every army has a command post and Hell choice the place were it would have the most advantage, you see demons are born from mankindís wicked ways.....So to get more soldiers you slay the wicked and Hells army of demons grow bigger and stronger. It's hard to believe that man could turn on their creator the way they did, did they not think this day would come? ..... did they think that their father would just turn the other cheek to their sins after he gave his only son to save them........Deacon stops to clear his head, the thoughts of what this world has become is more than he can bare. If only they could see the things I have seen.....he thought!.... Would they have still walked the path they took?
Looking out over the city Deacon can see the battle raging, he can here the cry of women and children as Hells army sweeps across the city killing everything in its path. Why my Lord?...Why must things be this way? Deacon asks looking up to the Heavens.

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The following comments are for "Rise of the Angels"
by wllstrt40

The spelling and grammar in this piece were terrible! Have you ever heard of a paragraph? You should consider using them. It makes a story easy to read.

Also, check the lore of Christianity. Your story doesn't fit into Christian lore. And besides, the world is going to end on December 21, 2012. There will be no 2025 for us...hahaha

( Posted by: tqoftu [Member] On: December 14, 2007 )

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