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The jeering compliments
That serenade the halls
The loving insults accented by the American drawl
The hurtful indulgences
That take away my pain
The sweet demons
That take away my shame
The distorted mirror
That shows the hurt girl inside
The clarity of the broken glass
That gives the poet a place to hide
The insulting rectifications
That try and make it right
The evil wrongdoings
That swim through my head at night
This… is my complicated beauty




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The following comments are for "complicated beauty"
by deadlyslices420

wow...
this is very intense and really brings forth the disturbing circumstance that is this poem. I felt a bit uncomfortable just reading it. I am curious to know about the American drawl line. Does this give me a clue that the reader is foreign? Anyway, it resonated something in me...

( Posted by: karrinp [Member] On: January 25, 2004 )

to karrinp
thank you very much for your response on my poem. i wrote the american drawl line because though i was born in texas, my family is foreign. im happy that my poem stirred somethibng in you and made you think. if you would like to talk more. you can find me on aim and hotmail.

( Posted by: deadlyslices420 [Member] On: January 25, 2004 )

GOOD
I read your other works, and i think this is the best one by far. Good rhymes and rhythm, and the American drawl line got my attention. I really like it! Great job, keep up the work

( Posted by: diason [Member] On: January 27, 2004 )





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