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When a boy with a misspelled name
introduces himself to you.
Respells his name and then tells you
you should model sexy undies,
what's the correct reaction?

How do you cope when he smacks your ass
and pushes your buttons,
and alienates your friends?

You laugh and wonder how it is,
you two started talking at all.

And what do you do
when this boy looks at you.
The one dressed in black,
(with an attitude to match)
with friendship in his eyes?

How do you cope when you feel the
same look on your face?

What runs through your brain
when that same boy shows you he's really
a man of his word,
and of more than just jokes.
And silly games to drive you away?

When you know that you share more than
the need to tease others
and play vampiric video games
while mist covers the campus in a blanket of haze.

What do you do?

Well, I'll say that my friend,
that same man in black.
The same one who teases my friends
and trades insults like coins,
never let me decide,
he just slipped into my life
like a breeze after a blustery storm.

What I did was give in
and start caring again.
My trust lies in that misspelt name.
That man dressed in black.

"God grant me distraction."

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The following comments are for "What Do You Do? (A Poem for Danyul)"
by Darkshine Raven

men in black
Hi =D. I thought you captured the allure of the mysterious handsome stranger well with this piece. Well, handsome is in the eye of the beholder. Certainly the rebel with a quip for every clause. I liked the lines "mist covers the campus in a blanket of haze" and "trades insults like coins" and "the breeze after a blustery storm". The whole piece rolls along at a nice pace and flows well. Very fluid.

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: January 22, 2004 )

unique and young. very cool and refreshing.

( Posted by: Joe Quinn [Member] On: February 19, 2004 )

I'm glad you guys liked this poem. I wrote it for my friend for his birthday and he loves it too. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 19, 2004 )

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