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Is love suppose to hurt
Am I suppose to feel this way
Am I suppose to cry like this
Time doesn't heal all wounds

Nights are cold and scary
Wishing I was dead
Lying helpless thinking thoughts
Dreaming these dreams

I seem to be wondering in the dark
Feeling my way from day to day
I start to weep
I don't want to feel this way

Will someone help me
Help me from these feelings
Someone tell me it will be okay
Destined to be alone forever

Slipping, falling nothing nor anyone to hold on to
Lying in the dark
Time to go, time to leave
Time to say one last thing
Loving you kills me


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The following comments are for "Kills Me"
by disOrder

Once again
I have to disagree with Jess on this one, that's twice in one day.. hmm wonder what that means... but anyway.. I think that the format and structure of the this piece is what makes it poetry, good or bad. If it needs fleshing out, it can be done equally well in either format. No need to reclassify a work and change the entire way it's presented just because it doesn't leap off the page in it's current form. Edit, edit and edit again. That's what I'd suggest.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: January 22, 2004 )





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