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Her smile crackles and pops as she stretches the leather mask into a smile.

You don't know me.
She says in high lyrical notes.

I'm a mystery.

Though she never moves her pink frosted lips. I'm your friend, she lies when she does.

How long had she hated me I wondered. When did she turn? Why didn't I know that every word I said to her were lead bullets she carefully pocketed for later use?

I was fascinated by her shiny, sparkly webs that I unwittingly flew into, not knowing they were all around me.

She feigns shock when one by one those around me begin to hurl lead bullets in my direction. I duck and weave but the target is apparent.

She shakes her head and clucks her tongue. The gold nylon tendrils of her hair swing from each glue plug.

Nevermind, she says, they're just jealous! Look at my new tatoo!

She bares her forty-six year old back. The angry red and blue pattern peaks over the top of her cutoffs.

Her cell phone rings. She winks a frosted blue crepe eyelid at me and leaves to distribute more bullets.


Author's Note:
elaboration on my poem "Stardust"



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All that we see or seem, is but a dream within a dream....
Edgar Allen Poe


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The following comments are for "Stardust Revealed"
by poesandpoetry

stardust songs
You keep drawing me in with that stardust. You know all the atoms in the universe were created in stars long ago that eventually blew apart and then formed our sun and moon and earth system. Which means we are all made up of stardust, so to speak. I like your use of colour and the sounds of the words like crackles and pops and you stretch it from high notes to tongue clucking. Very musical prose.
Cheers
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: January 13, 2004 )

stardusting
Yes, I know, my obsessive nature causes me to "beat the dead horse" - I was trying to explain the poetry better - which is why I love this site, because sometimes we think that others can read our thoughts. Isn't is weird how pain brings forth such vivid imagery? Look for my poem "Storyteller" to be posted ... it was rejected at another site how "pathetic"...(.org) ahem.
As always, your comments are priceless. PS -why the new avatar?

( Posted by: poesandpoetry [Member] On: January 13, 2004 )

new avatar
Aah. I'm a bit of a chameleon really. When I write, it's like Joseph Campbell talks about in The Masks of God, I play the role or roles like an actor. How the primitive storeyteller acts out all the characters by trying on the different masks, or skins. So I do that in real life. Change my hair and face and type of clothes and see the different reactions it brings from others. Here I'm just showing the face behind all the masks. The male equivalent of the dance of Salome except our layers or veils go on and on. What's next I wonder? I don't plan it, I just go with the seasonal flow. :)
Keep up the good work and I'll look for your story p&p
respects
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: January 13, 2004 )

almost forgot
Oh Yes. Almost forgot. There was another reason too p&p. Someone called "handshake" made a strange comment on my blog "flying foxes" that I felt was a bit disrespectful to people who had commented on my writing. I wrote a story called Dream Demon but decided not to post it. Instead I wrote "wonderful world of women" sort of like the ultimate revenge being a life lived well. Then I thought I might show the face behind the masks, so that's why I chose this present one. I'd almost forgotten that reason and person already. ;)
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: January 14, 2004 )





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