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I thoguht you were the one.. my shining star. I thought you'd be the one I called from a far. I thought when I saw ur face it would always make my day. I thougth when I heard ur voice my worries went away, but now I know my thoughts were wrong
and I have to go on with lifes journey no matter how hard or long.


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The following comments are for "u wern't the one"
by u wont understand

Another good 'un
I can't think of anything more to say because Claire's already said it. (now who's a sheep, Claire? - oh and have you checked the lounge in the forums for (ahem) discussion on the 'chatspeak' subject?)
Paul the baa, baa Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: January 14, 2004 )

No matter how hard..

Your poem is good I can say…
It is deep reflection of your feelings…
You have kind of strength and restrain .I can figure that out when you say [I have to go on with lifes journey no matter how hard or long.]
All The Best..

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: April 1, 2004 )

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