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Fresh Heart

Lightning fingers separating buttons
Silken fingers slipping under skin
Quicksilver fingers burrow through
tissue, organs,bone and sinew
touching tender heart that lies within.

Gentle fingers stroke it into rhythm
match yours beat for beat
and rest for rest
Clever fingers coax it from my torso
hold it in your hands,
first tight,then more so
your cupping palm and fingers form a nest.

If it should wither now from inattention
If you should careless break it into two
If you should tire of holding it whenever
do not hand it back, for I can never
reinsert it; far simpler
to grow fresh heart anew.



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The following comments are for "Fresh Heart"
by cybele

a certain grace
Hi Cybele. I thought I'd better stick to clearer descriptions but this like claire says has an indescribable grace to it. Captures both the lust and the heartache and break. It feels elusive and yet tangible. Umm..worldy and I'm running out of trite adjectives. An interesting and unusual rhyme you have managed to waeve too, or that might be just my way of reading it. So I've probably just been able to hint at the indescriable part and misssed the gracefulness of it. I think I should have just said Graceful and Wise.
respects
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: January 12, 2004 )





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