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as the pain lifet me off my feet, i think lifes pain can not be beat, bot with a scissors, razors,knives, and sometimes even death. but what can i do but let the pain grasp on to my every last breath.

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~*Abigail*~


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Abigail
You seem to have a troubled life at the moment. You also have the ability to put your problems into words and the maturity to listen to constructive criticism without flaring up and swearing at your critics (unlike some contributers). Not a single poet on this website is perfect, (my Habour poem being a classic example). Keep writing, study other poets' work, as well. E.A. Poe and Charles Baudlaire spring to mind. My only criticism here would be the overuse of the word 'but'.
Have a good day
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: January 9, 2004 )





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