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hey heres something i jsut threww together during school
later,

words are jumbled footballs are fumbled. the baby's crys are loud show off kids make there teachers proud. scary nightmares distracting daymares. sunshie always fades and parents yell at bad grades.

bad days bad ways

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~*Abigail*~


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by u wont understand

welcome to the site
Abigail, I read your other work and was really impressed with 'mind and feelings of the cut'. But, this poem, although potentially powerful, loses impact through typos. You've put together a clever montage of emotions and imagery. It would stand a re-write and could really 'kick ass'(do you still say that in the US?) I loved the last line 'bad days, bad ways'.
Keep writing, you have an original voice.
Ciao
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: January 7, 2004 )





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