Yeah, I know Pen. 5-7-5 just couldn't contain my talents, I needed more syllables! Actually, I just wanted to try out an alternative, albeit disallowed, method. Believe it or not, this took me a half-hour, and I still don't like it. I was going for sibilance, cacophony, sibilance. Didn't.
Posted by: Washer [Member] On: January 2, 2004
Washer; very nice haiku you have here.
Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: January 3, 2004
hey, really lovely. truly.
"as one" was the only bit that threw me. what did you mean?
Happy to Oblige ark
ark, firstly, I would like to thank you for reading *MEADOW*, one of the most read poems on lit.org which will surely go on to remembered by the masses. Heh.
I admit the image I used was not perfect, but when I said "as one" I referred to the motion of grass in the wind. Though each stalk moves individually, when they all move together, it produces an effect which makes them all seem intrinsically connected.
Posted by: Washer [Member] On: February 22, 2004
thanks for the clarification, washer. sure, yeah: i've seen grass do that.
i'll just blithely pass by your half-concealed reference, okay? ;)