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Moonlight between barnboards.

Cornstalks rattle.

My parents are getting old.





Streetlamps in a snowstorm.

As if everything were perfect.





1 a.m. -

mouse in birdfeeder.





A bird chirps at 5 a.m. -

winter is getting old.





A fish flops on a dock

like my mopey heart.





I am lucky -

lilypads make me happy.







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The following comments are for "VARIOUS HAIKU"
by gomarsoap

HEY: Did Everyone Miss This?

holy CRAP, gomar, this is stunning. can't quite believe claire and i are the only ones who've commented. i remember the condensed-moment feeling of some of your other work... how my stomach kind of drops and time freezes around me in the reading of it. you have a great gift. please give us more; i miss you greatly around here.

~ark

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 22, 2004 )

wow
I have to throw my praise in with ark's and then thank him/ her for bringing this to my attention! This really is magical. I adore the pictures you put in my head with these words. Beautiful. =D

And please do come back...*sniff* I miss ya!

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 22, 2004 )

new form?
They stand well individually, and even better as a sequence. Good work, man.


john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: April 13, 2004 )

Like a painting
This piece is like a painting. I am there; a part of the scene. Amazing work.

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: May 25, 2004 )

Various
Reeds in moonlight
death stalks life
a black bass rolls

( Posted by: Lionel Gizik [Member] On: May 26, 2004 )

Wow Gomar
I can't tell you how glad I am I found this wonderful peace! I love it a lot. You are already on my favourite list - just wish I could put this on a favourite reading list. huni

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

Bob, if you get this
I know neither of us have been submitting lately, and I don't want us to get out of touch - I've repeatedly wanted to discuss haiku & other short work in general, and your work in particular, with you, but felt the Comments Section too restrictive for this. If you're into it, drop me an enote at johnlibertus@yahoo.com, so we'll have each others' adresses.


john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: August 13, 2004 )

Haiku
You always write so well, dear friend.

--R.K.Singh

( Posted by: R.K.Singh [Member] On: January 19, 2010 )





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