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Corner

Tip face up to azure granduer
cloudhead godhead rolling reaches
to stroke me through my cap of storebought hair.

Brilliant rays of deity
kiss me through the pancake
painted canvas I call face.

Breeze blowing bennediction
loves me through the shiny vinyl
sequined spandex plastic package
which wraps this bitter body
that I offer up for sale.




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The following comments are for "Corner"
by cybele

red dress on
very effective street portrait, particularly in the context -

two misspellings you might want to correct: grandeur and benediction.

Being cynical, I might say the body's up for rent, strictly speaking, rather than for sale.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: December 27, 2003 )

Thanks, guys
I appreciate so much your input and opinions. Of course, the poem *could* be about an actress, rather than a hooker.

And the corner might be the juncture between an unsavory profession, herself, and God.

But you knew that.

( Posted by: cybele [Member] On: December 31, 2003 )

Sorry I missed it
the first time around. This is an exquisite portrait as someone above likely said. I may have to try my had at something like this soon. If I can tear myself away from the fantasy serial I'm working on. It's like heroin, writing in installments. Somebody slip me some methadone.. lol

Anyway enough of my insane ramblings. Cybele this was a beautiful poem, thank you for sharing it with us.

And good luck, with all things Nixon.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: March 19, 2004 )

cybele, good job!
and good job to bart for drawing our attention to this old-ish one. boy, anything that got posted around christmas time missed me entirely...

i have a piece called corner, too, the very first one i posted here, in fact. a very different take on the idea, but similar... the woman on the corner, and what she sees, and who sees her.

very dense and full, cybele. dramatic. well done.

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: March 19, 2004 )

My goodness!
This is absolutely amazing. Speechless am I. Speechless! Very impressive poem.

"which wraps this bitter body / that I offer up for sale".

Wow.

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: March 19, 2004 )

Thank you
Thank you all very much for your kind comments. I have always liked juxtaposition best.

( Posted by: Cybele [Member] On: March 22, 2004 )





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