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I dreamed that you had left me, that you didn't care anymore, not even enough to tell me why.

I didn't know where you were, and I thought to ask one of our sons. Then I realized that you'd probably told them not to tell me where you were, that all I could do was ask how you were, and hope you'd find out I'd asked, and would realize I cared.

Then I dreamed I was talking to you and trying to explain that I can't help being me, that I don't want you to go away.

Then I told you that if you got involved with another man, it was over between us, and I started waking up.

And I heard you tell me that you understood, that you wouldn't.

Then I remembered that you've died.

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The following comments are for "I dreamed that you had left me"
by johnlibertus

the last line sticks in your throat as you read it.. its power lies in it being so unexpected..

at first i felt the beginning was over-simplified.. but when i read it again.. it conveys the emotion well.. with lines like "I was talking to you and trying to explain that I can't help being me, that I don't want you to go away" ..the narrator seems almost childlike.. and the last line drives it home with loss being the reason for this small, uncertain voice.

beautiful as always John.

( Posted by: pixie [Member] On: December 17, 2003 )

I actually had this dream, Pixie, just as I describe.

"pity me that the heart is slow to learn
what the swift mind sees at every turn"

- Edna St. Vincent Millay

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: December 17, 2003 )

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