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I am so alone
my body is full of death
rotten lonelyness

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Ań:di



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by demonspawn666

Meh
A tad immature for a poem i think.. Sounds like a phrase from the Comedy South Park, in which one of the boys turn "goth"... I'm sure you watched that and submitted one of the poems which was quoted in the episode.

( Posted by: king lucifer [Member] On: December 16, 2003 )

hmmmm...
i'm htinking you really had some feelings that you wanted to get out. And this was the only way you really say them. if i'm wrong, well, dont' read the rest of this. if i'm right i think you should htink about how you were feeling when you wrote this, think about what you wanna say with this and then think about how you want it to make other people feel. and maybe expand on what you've written. tell me WHY you feel so alone. tell me WHY it's soooo rotten inside of you. i really hope this is helping you.... if not i'm sorry.~

( Posted by: ruina [Member] On: December 17, 2003 )

thanx
ruina thanx for your comment it really did help but i would rather keep my poetry and my personal life fairly seperate. This poem may express how i feel but it also leaves a bit of mystery to the reader.

( Posted by: demonspawn666 [Member] On: December 30, 2003 )





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