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You asked me to do this for you
And I've failed at trying
To which you tell me
'Are you...?' Eyebrows lifted.
I answer with my head bowed
'Yes, I...' Looking at my feet
You grasp my head and turn it up
Toward the light and shake
I feel the need to break out
You keep me in the stand
While I wrestle with my desire
As you lean back and nap.


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The following comments are for "Box"
by Xlnt_1

9/10
Damn near perfect. Poetry as flash fiction as autobiography as desperate emotional communication.

Excellent work!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: December 15, 2003 )





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