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Please don't touch me there
I feel uncomfortable
You are my Father

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"In a healthy capitalist economy, some people are going to be out-competed," Knoep said. "I'm sorry, but some of those fuck-ups have fucked themselves. I am not condoning an anarchic 'fuck or be fucked' ethos, but I can hardly get behind a welfare state that punishes the unfucked by fucking all equally."




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The following comments are for "A Sweet Little Poem"
by Sharikov

courage
i think it's damn beautiful that people like you can find the courage to talk about your horrif experiences in so much detail. many congratulations to you for coming to terms with the causes of your nasty little brain.
i especially liked the graphic exposition of the events in the garden shed with the angle grinder. has your penis grown back yet? i really do hope so.
i also loved the part where you leaped up and shot your father in court when he was being tried. you shouldn't feel so bad about missing his head. it's his massive schlong that was the problem after all, and it won't work so well with that bloody great hole in it.
many of us across the globe can learn from your inspiring honesty.

( Posted by: silas [Member] On: December 14, 2003 )

entartete Kunst
As we all know Silas, true art comes from suffering. And how I have suffered. Just this morning I found out the Supermarket had run out of crisps. Not even Salt 'n' Shake! Here's a challenge for you my friend, can you make a Haiku using 'When I hear the word culture, I reach for my revolver'?
Big Cheers

( Posted by: Sharikov [Member] On: December 15, 2003 )

disturbing
ew . . . not all poetry has to be forged from depression and horrific childhood memories. I say that's a lie, poetry needs to be more lighthearted, who want's to be sad?

( Posted by: Titus Tolshem [Member] On: December 20, 2003 )

Re:Disturbing
Humour is a great defence mechanism. If we can't laugh about uncomfortable things, what are we supposed to do? Spend every day avoiding the issues? I'm sure that's a lot less healthy.

( Posted by: Sharikov [Member] On: December 22, 2003 )

slab of meat
i disagree, i thrive on pain. i like it to boil up inside then bloody kill someone, its quality. only teasin mate! get it all out lad, exercise your fat demons

( Posted by: leeroy [Member] On: December 22, 2003 )

Oh Leeroy!
My demons are right fat, mate. I even call one of them Fatty. The stumpy little begger ate all my Pot Noodles. A whole cupboard full! Oi, wheres Chapter 2 of Box Of Geese? There's a sweating in my pants of anticipation. Your writing reminds me of a friend called Jon I once had. He was obsessed with Flip Pops and Mushy Peas. He was in a band too, they were called Scunt, I think. If my memory serves me well, the bass player was a roight looker.

( Posted by: Sharikov [Member] On: December 23, 2003 )





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