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A dark cool night
walk outside
and feel the dew soaked grass
the music is already playing of
grass blades dancing,and animals unseen

All you need is the cloths on your back
leave behind all worries
along with your shoes and socks

Walk until you find
the perfect bed of grass
lay on your back
breath deep
notice every detail

Look up
at the charcoal sky
sprinkled with every persons dreams

To find me
look up
at the skys White Dust Plains

Thats where I'll be

You might be able to join me
but
olny if you are free
and
need to be with me, forever
cause you will never want to return to
the past



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The following comments are for "Find Me"
by hazardsam88

find me?
Not sure what I think of this as poetry. Some good imagery, but there's no rhythm, no pattern, no poetic devices of any sort. Might work better as prose.

And, hey, I thought of Peter Pan when I read this. I'm guessing that wasn't your intention, right? Sorry! Mind filled with fancy today. :)

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: December 8, 2003 )

I know who I am
Seek His kingdom and His righteousness and then all those things will be add unto you.

( Posted by: Judi1 [Member] On: February 14, 2004 )

I like it.
Nice piece. I like the rythm; it's a dreamily quieting rythm that adds a peaceful air to the poem. Your images are great; I'm jealous. I'm not sure exactly what it's about, but that hasn't stopped me (or many others) from admiring Emily Dickenson's work. You did have some errors in your puctuation and grammar; you should iron those out as your poem is good enough that small things really rob a great deal from it. Keep posting; you've got some real talent. (You might want to read some Dickenson if you haven't, I think you'd like her.)

( Posted by: The Recycled Avatar [Member] On: June 6, 2004 )





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