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Every night itís the same
Youíre running in circles
Chasing the same things
You keep proving my point

Day after day you race
Youíre running in circles
Running to find an escape
Slipping again into a void

You canít keep chasing
Canít keep running
You canít keep looking for more

You canít keep faking
Acting like youíre finding
Anything other than closed doors


Every fight is the same
Youíre running on repeat
Acting the same scripts
You keep making me right

Time after time you cry
Youíre running on repeat
Finding a way to deny
Slipping again out of the light

You canít keep chasing
Canít keep running
You canít keep looking for more

You canít keep faking
Acting like youíre finding
Anything other than closed doors


And someday this has to stop
Someday youíll understand
Youíve got to hold on to what youíve got
Hold on as long as you can

You canít keep chasing
Canít keep running
You canít keep looking for more

You canít keep faking
Acting like youíre finding
Anything other than closed doors


Youíre running in circles
Youíre running in circles
You must be dizzy by now

Youíre running in circles
And you want to get out
But you donít know how

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"If the only tool you own is a hammer, every problem will eventually begin to resemble a nail."


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The following comments are for "Etcetera"
by Jayson Carter

Definitely lyrics
Oh yeah, these are definitely lyrics. No worries -- each time I post a poem I nearly categorize it as something else!

Not bad. I agree that there's perhaps a little too much repetition, but that's usually not as much of a problem in lyrics as in poetry. Once sung, the repetition may actually be quite effective.

It's decent. I get the feeling though, having read most of the stuff you've posted, that you're someone whose talent would really shine if only you'd write about topics that are truly present for you. I get the feeling you want to say something important, something about "big" topics and "big" issues, but it comes off sometimes as forced and trite. More like a Reader's Digest feature or a movie of the week than real, honest, heartfelt, poetry.

And you show, in many of your lines, rhythms, and techniques, an aptitude for better work. My advice would be to stop caring what you write about, and how, and what people will say, and how you might affect others, and focus more on pouring out your own thoughts and emotions in literary form. Then I think we'll see what you're really capable of.

Just advice -- ignore me if you wish! :)

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: December 8, 2003 )





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