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The following was a response to a critic of mine who I felt did not take the time to anaylyze my work before commenting on it. In an attempt to silence him, this 8-line verse was released from my arsenal. Looking back, I was way out of line, but the rhymes in this set of phillipics are worthy of postage, or so I believe. You can be the judge of that.

Enjoy the poetry: Jayson M. Carter

I say what I say and you can't change my mind
Assumptions bind the blind till logic shoves it aside
What's said can be read in the shade of red wine
But it's best to resist its effect on your mind
Let be what you see but don't understand
And leave pureness untouched by your vinegar hands
Think what you will but keep it inside
The blind can't agree to give an eye for an eye

"If the only tool you own is a hammer, every problem will eventually begin to resemble a nail."

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The following comments are for "The Blind"
by Jayson Carter

power punch.
I agree with what you said in the intro - definitely worthy of being posted, even if you've cooled down from the feelings when you wrote it.

The rhythm and rhyme structure is excellent; I can almost feel the verbal vitriol. It's got the same sense of anger as some rap music, and for similar reasons.

It's an great piece of writing. But I'm glad I wasn't on the receiving end of it! :-o

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: December 2, 2003 )

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