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_Revenge_

Revenge is like the sweet saccharin
In a sugarfree sparkling soda.

At first there is a surge
Of sweetness to savour:
Bubbling and fizzing in your head.

But when drink is all gone,
The taste lingers and changes:
What was sweet becomes bitter;
A growing discomfort that you ever partook.

And yet with the knowlege
That to bring back the sweetness
All you need do
Is pour another glass.


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Spudley Strikes Again
www.BadPuns.com
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The following comments are for "Revenge"
by Spudley

Profound!
Quite powerful Spud...not a pun in sight!
Very profound for one so young...I'm impressed!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: November 29, 2003 )

soft drinks
Yes. Nice one spudley. You have achieved a nice bittersweetness with this one. It's soft, melancholy and soulful, quite deep in its clarity and texture. Less is more, and water is free. All round good taste.
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: November 29, 2003 )

that was awesome
that was awesome man, keep it up.

( Posted by: DEMONeyesBLUE [Member] On: November 29, 2003 )

cheers
cheers for the one-cal revenge....Ithink we all have it in us.....somewhere.....Morganth

( Posted by: Morganth [Member] On: December 21, 2003 )

Spud*
"Loved this, very Dejected."

BLESSINGS,

{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: February 26, 2004 )

Had me another diet coke
and some more material from you! Tight, still thinking about it, and rolling it around in my mind.

( Posted by: CaptainKeyboard [Member] On: March 3, 2004 )

belated
A belated thank you for all the comments on this. I'm touched.
This is a piece that means quite a lot to me for one reason and another, so I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: March 4, 2004 )





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