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oh flabbergasted birdies you flutter so nic'ely -
yet your gazes be hard as they stare at me icily!
too many times your eyes crossed me more than twice
thrice the number that is commonly nice-
fuck it --
your patterns, your fashions, your dull
dank bastardly passions!

my mountains lie west where the birdies -
they fly!
onto a dim and forboding dark sky!
i wish to see their snow capped white peaks -
they're tortured ribbed beauty -
their rivers that speak.
but those damn birdies keep blocking the view
in thier whirl for the sun they block the sky's blue -
suffocate me
beautifully
perfectly
and silently --
ssh!
hear them fluttering so wondfr'lly


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