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In that garden I stayed till dawn.
Breathing in the mists that surrounds all form

I told you beneath that calm that I didnít want to stay
I breathed all the words that you took to yourself to speak

I consoled your thoughts from flying away ahead of me
And then you disappeared into a foundation of illusions.

That undefined commotion that sets your heart to grow
Lays cramped in a hollow mould

Creeping into that chilled void
I swallowed what we had to sow

Travelling in that way and away from all things tamed
You dissolved into that misty dawn

And I left to bear it all
To bear alone my misconceived illusions.

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