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Butterflies are ugly things
And your lips curves so distractingly
Who are you and what do you want
In this prodigious insanity
Mixed of breath’s breathlessness?

Would you be offended
If I say no dream butterfly is this love
Nor you such brilliant wings
Instead- compare you to coal
(since jewels flash me blind)
Happy in my earthy embrace.


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The conscious shape reality.


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The following comments are for "The Consummation of Our Cliche"
by Furius

cliche
i read this a bit differently from bob.. in the sense that love sees past the surface..? because despite the fact that she may not possess "brilliant wings".. she still proves distracting.. despite the earthly atmosphere.. love stil exists.. and love is the greatest cliche of all..? maybe i'm over interpreting here (again)

the first stanza was a little bit confusing.. each line alone is excellent..
like "your lips curve so distractingly" (i'm assuming you meant curve not curves..)
.. but put together.. i got a bit lost.

my favourite part had to be "insanity/ Mixed of breath’s breathlessness".. beautiful

( Posted by: pixie [Member] On: November 29, 2003 )





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