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Itís everywhere
These presence
Distracting, so bright
Clutter the floor
Shiny foil
Hurts the eyes
Look away

But thereís no away
No escape
Heaps, stacks
Towering around
No air
Close to falling
Spreading
Enveloping

Theyíre so excited
Seeing old happiness
Potential we forgot
Shaking and prodding
They mustnít see inside

The inside
Of every cheery box
Is darkness



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The following comments are for "{DRAFT1} Never in Front of the Kids"
by shadazar

oooh, harsh!
A very cynical, if entirely accurate take on holiday gift-giving; very appropriate. I like the juxtaposition of darkness against the bright clutter of many opened packages.

-c

( Posted by: cybele [Member] On: December 3, 2003 )





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