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(best listened with Sarah Brightman's Bailero)

are you going to swift nostalgia lanes?
racing for time
as a biker in the wrong track
pushing each day to win, no luck

the streets cram with souls
wanting more, needing more
each looking for vague directions, specifically
a dull traffic of weary travellers
and rush-hour gurus with their cash sentiments
in this forever called moments,

one-lifetime: prolific spaces of days' dreams
catch us, oh, wispy ghosts of reality;

where our eyes close to old songs
asking curiosities turn to dust
and see our shadows enclose
to bygone years like torn pics superimpose

on forlorn nights --

i feel madness in this lifetime
quick pseudo-asphyxia,
when sanity is only a necessity
to live and unlive
the stories of telling

of untelling --

appendages of the former suns escaping
haunted memories of twilight hopes
open arms to the road of life; its beauty
we catch these elusive, wispy ghosts of reality

reach for the star,
go beyond barriers
move, don't stop, friend
between us we find our peaks
and beyond

no fast pedals
at quarter noon, slowly
a biker's sad, watery face
to catch passing, wispy ghosts of reality

we are the fragments of strange dreams
thread into the hope's needle hole
to tame chaos

fading,
finding something
in the void;
finding ourselves
even if we are none

and finish our miles with resolve

------
Be daring, be different, be impractical, be anything that will assert integrity of purpose and imaginative vision against the play-it-safers, the creatures of the commonplace, the slaves of the ordinary. -- Sir Cecil Beaton (1904-1980) English photographer


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The following comments are for "imagina"
by Idomis

biking
Wow, there are some really good phrases in here. Lots of creativity mixed with consistent imagery. I really felt your point being driven home. Very nice poem. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: November 23, 2003 )

sweaty
Thank you! What's your most favorite line there? What are some aspects of the poem which you think needs improvement?

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: November 24, 2003 )

"imagina"
Wow. Now this is true poetry that probes and picks and makes a person think. A pleasure to read. Well done. ~Pam

( Posted by: PamelaALamppa [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )





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