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He lays beside me,
Thinking I want him to stay.
A small part of me does...
A child that is lonely.
He lays beside me,
Trying to find the words,
To say "Lets just be friends"
I already knew before he spoke
I felt the faint echo,
Of love I should never have given.
A love that wasn't perfect,
A love that ravaged me whole.
And here I see the replacement,
Nothing but a body to keep me warm.
Right now..that is all I want.
But still, I can't ignore...
The echo of something more.
I don't want him to stay,
He wont even if I did.
He lays beside me,
Not knowing that I am empty.


Loneliness will not betray.

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The following comments are for "Replacements"
by Bleed

This reminds me...
in a good way of "One Night" by the Corrs, where in the flash of a night of intimacy we unwittingly give our hearts. You've approached the subject even more skillfully. I identify because I've lain beside someone with intimate skin and empty soul.

( Posted by: amyhpete [Member] On: November 24, 2003 )

Your feelings are expressed so well...I can relate to the feeling..It was awesome

( Posted by: Button [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

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