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Out of time comes trust.
out of anger comes lust.
I would have tried
but you told me I lied.
My life was changed
slowly twisted and deranged.

Out of the night you came.
Telling me chaos wasn’t the same.
I stayed for a while trusting the hope.
Giving the time to learn to cope.
But when the sun rose I ran.
I stepped over life and pain as I went.
I felt the fury of life and became bent.
Your words destroyed my mind
How you had said time wasn’t kind.
How you had said I was a liar, how you said I couldn’t love.

Then I remembered how the light fell from above.
How I had felt when I had tasted your kiss.
Then I opened my eyes and felt what I would forever miss.

I thrashed in memory Of the times we shared
I loved for the times you did say you cared.
The night in your room when we were together
It made me hope I’d find you, It made me believe in once and forever.


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The following comments are for "confusion through kisses"
by DEMONeyesBLUE

Nice Work
I really think this is an excellent poem. I like some of the phrasing you've used, my favorite being "out of anger comes lust." It's a strong opening and it'll bring people into the poem. Good job!

( Posted by: vegibrgr [Member] On: November 21, 2003 )





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