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Dedicated to Ariane for always being there for me.

Ice cream that you are
Cold to the teeth
To the tongue an icey death
To the brain a frozen triumpth

Sugary to the sense
That pain is second to pleasure
Love for you beyond that of me
Forever your's, my sweet ice cream

Gorgeous to the eyes
Of illness or desire
Pallid to beauty
In all notions the same

Dreams of present Heaven
Tasteful yet eternal
Love for you beyond that of me
Forever your's, my sweet ice cream

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Pushing a lover to love another. Are you turned on?


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The following comments are for "Ice Cream"
by Tyrant Monkey

yum!
Very cute little poem. I felt that you were drawing a metaphor between the girl and the ice cream. Am I correct?

On a side note, I love mint ice cream and am craving it now! =P

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: November 18, 2003 )

thanks
Thanks a lot for always being so positive in your comments on my works.

( Posted by: tyrant monkey [Member] On: November 18, 2003 )

no problem
But you didn't answer my question!!! =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: November 18, 2003 )

oops!
Oops! Sorry, I forgot about that question. Yes, you were right that it is comparing ice cream to a girl.

Good job seeing that so easily!

^.^ - TM

( Posted by: Tyrant Monkey [Member] On: November 19, 2003 )





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