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They are with us from very young
Until we get old
As they take shape
Our lives stretch out to hold.

From our first steps
To our first date
We hoped this will last
At any rate.

They are with us when happy
With us when sad
They were the best times
We could ever have.

I remember the day we first met
Your smile so warm
As I held you so tight
How could I ever forget?

Time slips by, but we still look the same
We look so young, we never age
You cry tears of Love
As you turn over the page.

Here we are, in our later years
Having lived through our hopes and fears
They won't ever leave, get taken away
As we remember our younger days.


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The following comments are for "Memories"
by Storyteller

I'm only eighteen and I could relate to what you're saying here. There's alot that escapes us that only our memories keep alive. Sometimes I'm thankful for that and sometimes I'm regretful. Somethings are better forgotten, eh?

Good only problem is that some of your rhymes seemed a bit forced, especially in stanza two. Also, I noticed your stanzas got longer as you went on. You might wanna give that a look over as well. Good job. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: November 16, 2003 )

For Memories:
You're pretty good at writing poems. I liked this poem you wrote, and its theme. Memories can be happiness and sadness. I especially like this line..
"As they take shape
Our lives stretch out to hold."

It just kind of..wel..drew me in, I guess.
But I do have to agree somewhat with what Darkshine Raven said. Some of the rhymes do seem forced, and it does get longer in the end. Still, I give you a nine out of ten. Thanks for reviewing "Fallen Star" and rating it too.

( Posted by: Cryptic Rapture [Member] On: November 18, 2003 )

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