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Graceful deers no longer frolick through the evergreens
Can't you hear the lonely solemn cries the birds sing

Misery destroys our death

Mountains gray in a distance seem so cold
Stars millions of miles away unfold

K Max the Leapord


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by storycrazy2002

this is sad but great poem...i would call it Lonesome Cries..just a suggestion

( Posted by: larryta4 [Member] On: December 14, 2003 )

I like it. Perhaps a question mark at the end of line 2 might help? Very profound.

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 8, 2005 )

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