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Sitting alone in the corner of the room
Without the lights on, yes Iím sitting in gloom
Not moving from my position in the dark
Waiting, just waiting for my happiness to spark
Still not moving, Iím starting to feel cold
My arms are aching for someone else to hold
But it had been hours since you left me in my pain
And Iím not really sure that youíre coming back again
I have the phone beside me just in case you call
But you havenít done so yet and I feel like a fool
Looking out of the window now, gazing at the stars
This is how I spend my time when the whole night could be ours
Though I have searched the house twice over, Iíve not found a letter
I just hope you do come back, come back and make me better



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The following comments are for "Come back and make me better!"
by man eating maniac

come back and make me better
I like it so Im a sucker too, but whether we like it or not, poems and thoughts are always sparked by passion for others, be it man or female...I could feel the little child in you, something we all hate to unveil,but wouldnt the world be great if we thought more like children, forgiving, and sometimes forgetting the pain of being burnt

( Posted by: CoCo [Member] On: January 17, 2004 )

I Have To...
Agree with Jessica... You are wrong to think that you have to wait for someone to continue life...

It will be his loss when your love is showered on some one that can/will repay in kind...

Don't wait...

Live life...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

i agree with it too now
she was right back then, but when you feel low, you do want someone to make you feel good again, whether it be a parent, loved one or even just a friend. sometimes you can't manage it alone!

( Posted by: man eating maniac [Member] On: August 19, 2004 )

come back....
You know I am going to have to go against the grain with this. Knowing my current partner as I do has made me better, your right you don't need someone else, but in this context, I feel you do.

Just my thoughts.

Nice poem

Alex :-)

P.S. who are all these Unknowns grading work? Leaves a very unconfident feel.

( Posted by: Londongrey [Member] On: August 19, 2004 )

"Come Back and Make Me Better
This is not bad but You're better. Keep trying!

( Posted by: Dfortyseven [Member] On: April 30, 2005 )





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