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Looking back
on all the fun that was had,
the past month was all a blur.
So much happened, so much changed.
Iíve grown so much, and so strong.
I donít need anyone,
I donít need to touch of a hand,
or a soft kiss from the one I loved.
To keep me going, to keep me alive.
Iím on my own, and thatís how its going to stay.
In the end its always the same
a silly little girl, with a heart snapped in two

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The following comments are for "Memorys"
by SockRocker

This would be a much better poem if you removed every instance of "so" -- a rather useless word that ruins most lines it's in, no matter who's using it. It's just unnecessary and detracts from my own enjoyment. And really, isn't it my enjoyment that's most important here? ;)

I don't know what it is with the great last lines I've read today, but yours stands out as well. A conspiracy of cabooses.

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: November 12, 2003 )

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