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from cracked rock and
fissured steam vents
I am not the sum of
ephemeral complements

not the subject to ravages
of disreputed critics
I am descended of savages
spawn of genius and degenerates

I am not the full cup
brimming with anticipation
but a pyramid of dried rocks
built to this inauguration


------
-Lu


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The following comments are for "fissure"
by Lu

So Sue Me
I can't claim to be an avid reader of poetry, or indeed, a particularly imaginative person, so I'm going to ask you about a few points in the poem. If you feel that they were obvious or intended for a more intelligent audience, don't bother to reply.

"from cracked rock and
fissured steam vents"
Does this line mean to imply that you yourself have issued from steam vents, or that the "ephemeral complements" did?

How do the cup and pyramid relate?

By the way, I loved the rhymes in the poem, and the use of sibilance.

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: December 27, 2003 )





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