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Its the truth behind the swollen faces
beaten until they were torn
ripped off masks
only to show
the real you
the inner child
that you molested and abused
that poor you
and you won't let you self up
sitting in your own puddle
of dispair
playing in your own mess
of death stench
stretching your beliefs
on the whole world
but its the shallow end of the puddle
thicken in the blood
thicker than water
thin ice
falling in
drowing in hypothermia

"Pretty girls make graves..." -Jack Kerouac

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