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I've started some new stuff:

"I wish I knew why you were concerned about me last night on the phone
I barely heard your whisper
This coffin is a blister

And I fell forward into darkness into pain that left me feeling frail
This weakness is a splinter
I'll never bridge this river

So this pain inside
It builds up and rips
Straight through my side

I never wondered why
You didn't care
About me

This cry out outrage full of your hate filled with dreams of false imagination
Don't leave me hanging stories
Above the truths that I can't see

And everyone is leaving me is wanting me to curl up and just die
So you can break this silence
I think it's time to end this

So this pain inside
It builds up and rips
Through my sight

I never wondered why
You didn't care
About me

This pain inside
I lay down and cry
I open these eyes
And see black
I see you"

(Fun fun, neh?)

Pushing a lover to love another. Are you turned on?

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