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One hot steamy day along the Nile River Oobagwa, a tall, strong, African man, decided to try to be the first person to make it from one end of the Nile River to the other. The word gets around about his attempt and Mr. Boobo, the type that wears suits for jungles, gets mad because he wants to be the first.
The next day Oobagwa sets out on the river, birds are chirping, snakes hissing from the banks and a smile on his face. Along his journey while he’s enjoying the greenery and thinking of the fame he’ll have a boat rams him from behind and Mr. Boobo jumps on and threatens to kill him if he doesn’t stop. Oobagwa refuses and they get into a struggle with hand to hand combat. Finally, Oobagwa starts pinching him and Mr. Boobo pleas for mercy. So Oobagwa tied him up and continues on his journey but makes a wrong turn and gets lost and he doesn’t finish and somehow ends up in Europe.


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C.G.



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The following comments are for "The Nile River Fight"
by cgrisw2

are you serious?
This doesn't read like a serious attempt a writing a piece of fiction. It actually sounds like notes for a story. If it *is* serious, it would be improved by putting it in the past tense.

( Posted by: Susanb55 [Member] On: November 13, 2003 )





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