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Without you
A man's World would be cold and empty
Who would we dream of, or care about?
Our lives would be bleak as a Winter's
Night, of that, I have no doubt.

Without you
There'd be no colour just various shades of grey, there'd be no tomorrow every man would just live for today
Waking up in an empty bed
The deafening silence,screams in my head

Without you
We'd grow old and alone,thoughts like these chill my heart to stone
No feminine perfume, no gentle laughter
No Wedding Day, no happily ever after.

Without you
I'd be scared to dream
Nothing in this World would be worth a bean, so fill my Life with colour
Fill my senses with your feminine ways.

Ladies, celebrate all that is female
Give Life to every man's dream
Because without you, we're nothing
Only existing, never living
With nothing in between.


------
Storyteller


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The following comments are for "Without You"
by Storyteller

I know what you mean
I can speak for your feeling:

Ladies, we may not need you
but were you gone
My God! the sweetness flown -

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: November 6, 2003 )

Winter's nights
I rather enjoy winter's nights!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: November 6, 2003 )

I can understand...
I read your comment on my poem "Forever Gone" and I suppose this is how you feel without her. You wrote well, I like your use of words. I especially like the the second and third verses. Thanks for being the first one to review my poem, I was afraid that no one would read it. You gave me more hope.

( Posted by: Cryptic Rapture [Member] On: November 7, 2003 )

Without You
I really loved this, makes me feel special to be a woman. Thanks!!!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 11, 2004 )





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