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In a perfect world,
with perfect people
no one would cry and weep,
no one would do wrong.
I wouldn't feel this way..
people would be able to know.
If I would have known,
this is how it would be.
I'm not sure if I would have,
-would have layed that kiss
apon your lips, and said thoes words. For they
sealed the way I thought
it would be....for it made me
dream of what should be.
But it never came, and you
found her. But now
I cry...and cry,
and love you more.
For I wish you were mine,
and mine alone.


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The following comments are for "A Perfect Place"
by SockRocker

*pats you on the back*
cheer up!

This feels very spontaneous. Very sudden, like a wash of emotion. I like that kind of poetry.

Write a poem about your afterthoughts on the subject.

( Posted by: PsychicNoodle [Member] On: November 5, 2003 )





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