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He walked out, his sunny skirt clashing with the blinking red lights of the control panel.
“What’s that all about?” whispered Joe, a first-day man at the plant.
“That’s Bob, he’s perfectly normal. He just feels more comfortable in women’s clothing.”
“What’s with the shiner? Joe asked, pointing to his left eye. “Was he beaten up?”
“No. He says he was mowing the lawn and some mope drove by and called him a name. Bob answered that he should get out of his truck if he was man enough to repeat it to his face. The man accepted the invitation.”
“So they did fight.”
“Well, no. Joe was heading toward the man and a high heel got caught in a sidewalk crack.”


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KP



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The following comments are for "Head Under Heels"
by bobthepeeler

yes, but
great - near-continuous breakdown of expectation -

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: November 3, 2003 )

thanks, but
I just noticed, to my horror that the last line should read "Bob was heading," not "Joe was heading." Oh well.

( Posted by: bobthepeeler [Member] On: November 3, 2003 )

bobthepeeler
a nice twist in the ending...great job bobthepeeler!!! hehehehehe

( Posted by: akao [Member] On: November 5, 2003 )





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