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(Written for a friend to use at school. She was lazy and heaven forbid she actually write her own poem that had a Halloween-ish spirit to it.)

It was sullen the way he gazed at me
His eyes so blue, yet that black swirled in so gracefully
I couldn't put my finger on it
But something was off;... wrong...

Those fangs. Fangs? Should any being have fangs?
Should their encompasser have such pale skin?
Pale, yet soft
Soft like the silken sheets I rest my head upon each evening

No, it wasn't natural
It was evil, yet beautiful
It was... enticing

And so I died that night
My life was taken from me
And another was born unto my soul

I became death
I became Vampire

Pushing a lover to love another. Are you turned on?

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The following comments are for "I Am Vampire"
by Tyrant Monkey

Don't have many hallowe'en poems in here, do we? A nice little one this, though.

Soft like the silken sheets I rest my head upon each evening

That line really made the piece. Great image.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: November 2, 2003 )

I really liked that one line, too. Considering I wrote it in only a couple minutes in an instant message to that friend, I think it turned out pretty well. Thank you for the positive comment!

( Posted by: Tyrant Monkey [Member] On: November 2, 2003 )

I'd rather hear poems that you wrote for yourself.

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