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If I was a leaf
this time of year
What would I say
or would I cry a tear
If I was a leaf so bright,
pretty and bold
Please don't step on me
but hold
If I was a leaf falling
in the wind
Please pick me up
so I don't bend
If I was a leaf so crumbly
torn and brown
Please leave me alone
and let me down
If I was a leaf
this time of year
Say a prayer for me
so I can hear
If I was a leaf that
had eyes to see
Please don't rake me over
and let me be
If I was a leaf that
was pressed in a book
I would be crushed
but pretty to look
If I was a leaf that
was golden reddish yellow
Please find another
golden orangish fellow
If I was a leaf that
was waiting to be touch
Please rub my surface
and I will love you much




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The following comments are for "If I Was A Leaf"
by larryta4

Inconsistency?
Perhaps it is just me, but I find this poem a little inconsistent in meaning - first the leaf starts by saying that it wants to be left alone, and then it asks the reader to rub it. Not sure what you intended there. Otherwise, quite good. Good rhymes.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: October 31, 2003 )

Inconsistent but rather funny
Is it meant to be funny? I don't know but I found it funny anyway. The leaf seems so damned horny, and I think that explains the poem's inconsitency -- lust is often a confused scrambling of desires and satiations.

I didn't like the rhyming, actually. To me, it seemed forced at times. But that's just me, perhaps. I tend to despise rhyming anyway.

Good. Fun. Interesting.

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: October 31, 2003 )

If I was a Leaf
It wasn't written to be funny!

( Posted by: larryta4 [Member] On: November 1, 2003 )

Funny?
No, it didn't really sound funny to me either, but I can see where he's coming from - i mean, the idea of wishing you were a leaf almost sounds preposterous

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: November 1, 2003 )





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